Focus today’s post on the contrast between two things. The twist? Write the post in the form of a dialogue.
The Kids – Josh 8 Zac 11
Josh: “blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah” (loudly)
Zac: “shut up Josh”
Josh: “blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah” (even louder)
Zac: (getting red faced) “shut up Josh” (said louder and a shove on his shoulder)
Josh: (screams) “whaaaahhhhh you hurt me, blah blah blah” (screaming this now) “why do I have to stop, blah blah blah”
Zac: (eyes glazed in fury now) “Because your acting like an idiot, I hate the noise” (screaming now)
Josh: (crocodile tears now) “But your making more noise than me, your always making noises with your tics and your screaming at me, don’t tell me to shut up, muuuuummy zac told me to shut up and hurt me” (shouting really loudly now)
Zac: (stands up and wrestles Josh to the floor) “shuuuuuttt up, stop the noise, you imbecile, shuuuut UPPPPPP screaming and crying” (punches him lightly a few times in the arm
Josh: screams his head off now, really loudly
Mother steps in (me, frazzled, ear drums thumping): “Zac if you don’t like the noise, I suggest in future you don’t scream shut up at him, call him names, or wrestle him to the floor or he will end up making more noise”
Zac: (gets even more furious and attempts to argue and protest)
Mother: “Joshua get up and stop screaming, no one likes your constant noise, remember when you really need someone to pay attention to you rather than try to ‘get rid of the noise’ you will have no one there to help, be mindful when you make your noise”
Both frowning at me, snotty and red faced
Mother: “anyone want a biscuit?”
Episode over as if never happened
A typical 10 minutes in my life with one son who likes quiet yet seems to invoke noise and my other son who constantly loves to make a noise but seems not to know when to stop.
Nice ending 🙂
To push yourself, I’d try revising this and removing the names at the start of the lines, to write a more flowing dialogue. A lot of what you have in parentheses right now are great details to sprinkle throughout, and then you’d have a really engaging narrative rather than a script-style post. Just a thought!
(watch this space as this is something I am going to try 🙂 )
As always thank you for reading, does this resonate with you at all?