Writing 201: Water

Writing 201: Water

I have decided to take the plunge and join the WordPress Poetry course.  I love reading poetry but lack the confidence to try it myself, though I yearn to, so I am hoping that this course will give me the know how to forge forwards with this creative art.

Today’s Writing 201 Poetry challenge focuses on Water, providing us with a number of different assignments should we dare.

Writing 201: Water

Writing 201: Water

Water

Liquid breath flows over my body

Slithering warm droplets explore every curve

Silken steam catches against the perspex

Revealing fingertip tales of old

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And now for a  haiku of which I was dreading, and it comes up in the first challenge of the Writing 201: Poetry course, just my luck 😀

The structure of haiku is preset for you: three lines containing five, seven, and five syllables, let’s give it a go.

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Haiku

Liquid breath cloaks me

Clouds of steam dust the perspex

Fingertips tell tales

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Today’s device: simile

simile (pronounced SEE-me-lee), like its name suggests, makes a connection or introduces the idea of similarity between two concepts that aren’t intrinsically connected, leaving an interesting mental image in its wake. It’s a fancy name for saying that cake is like poison, or that a baby’s wails are as loud as thunder. If you’re up for it, include a simile in your poem today.

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Seeing as I am new to this, incorporating a simile in to my poem perhaps a stretch too far, something I need to work on, however I will try a simple sentence containing one for constructive criticism please 🙂

Cascading rain is like the brush upon my hair

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Thank you for reading and if you have time to indulge me in your thoughts, some constructive criticism or just that you ‘might’ have enjoyed it, I would really welcome your comments, Justine xx

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© Justine Nagaur

 If you wish to find out more about the Poetry Course provided by WordPress that lasts two weeks, starting 16.2.15, please click here:  Writing 201: Poetry

 

This post is also contributing towards:

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  76 comments for “Writing 201: Water

  1. February 16, 2015 at 12:19 PM

    Excellent job for someone whose not a poet.

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    • February 16, 2015 at 12:23 PM

      heh thank you, ive written i think two poems before on my blog, followed many poets and just admired from afar. Really appreciate you taking a look, now going to pop to yours 🙂 x

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  2. February 16, 2015 at 12:23 PM

    You’re some serious student and poet! 😉 Great take on the task!

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    • February 16, 2015 at 12:31 PM

      hah thank you i am trying to be diligent and learn 🙂 You are very experienced at haiku, its always appealed but confused me lol x

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  3. February 16, 2015 at 12:33 PM

    Well done sweet friend! I think you did a wonderful job at poetry. I encourage you to continue to let it flow. I think you have a lot of wonderful talent I can see it. Have a wonderful Monday! Big hugs! Yay for you! ❤ xx

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    • February 16, 2015 at 12:40 PM

      awe thank you for such positive feedback i love poetry, its great to get a chance at learning it better xxx

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      • February 16, 2015 at 12:43 PM

        I agree with you! I think sometimes it is a matter of letting your inner soul out! I do believe you have a beautiful writing gift. Let your light shine! I love your profile picture. I’ve been meaning to tell you that! XXXX

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        • February 16, 2015 at 1:43 PM

          awe thank you, you always fill me with smiles x

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  4. February 16, 2015 at 12:50 PM

    Excellent, very evocative and so true to your style!

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  5. February 16, 2015 at 1:00 PM

    Oops, I just wrote a long response and realized I was talking metaphor, not simile. Simile is a type of metaphor. Metaphor is your first line “Liquid breath flows over my body” while simile would be “Flowing water like liquid breath over my body”. Anyway, I like the poem and yes, after I double checked the meaning, your simile works 🙂

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    • February 16, 2015 at 1:43 PM

      ahhhh thank you i get it and its great to learn, thank you so much for highlighting that 🙂 Glad you like it, popping by to yours now x

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  6. February 16, 2015 at 1:23 PM

    I love it, and I am happy to see you are finding confidence to try!

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    • February 16, 2015 at 1:41 PM

      Thank you so much, confidence is key I think otherwise it stagnates the creativity 🙂 x

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  7. February 16, 2015 at 1:31 PM

    Well done–the combination works for all the challenges. The juxtaposition of image and words had me reading from top to end. Your image is a mysterious abstraction that is a curious abstraction. Happy Photo Challenge.

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    • February 16, 2015 at 1:40 PM

      haha thank you for such wonderful words, very uplifting and encouraging 😀

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      • February 16, 2015 at 1:43 PM

        I wanted to welcome you to the challenge, and got caught up in your post. Delighted to have you as part of the fun and photo community.

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        • February 16, 2015 at 1:44 PM

          hehe thank you, you have a great challenge, i usually partake on my artistic license blog but wanted to blend the image in with the poetry this time 🙂 x

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  8. NotAPunkRocker
    February 16, 2015 at 2:52 PM

    Pretty awesome for your “first” attempt! I considered this challenge but decided that I can’t find the time to even reply to my own comments yet, much less write to spec!

    Awesome job 🙂

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    • February 16, 2015 at 4:27 PM

      hah yes I do know that feeling and thank you for lovely words. How are you doing these days I havbn’t had time to catch up on posts yet? x

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      • NotAPunkRocker
        February 16, 2015 at 4:28 PM

        No worries, I haven’t had time to write anything for a few days now. That’s about how I am doing LOL

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        • February 16, 2015 at 6:27 PM

          heh….the figurines no doubt are watching and waiting x

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  9. February 16, 2015 at 3:36 PM

    Very well done indeed … you’ve started out with a bang … the photo is intriguing and I liked how you described water .. very sensual … the haiku is very good … you’re way better than you’ve let on! We’ll be seeing you at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai in no time!!! Bravo …

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    • February 16, 2015 at 4:28 PM

      haha you made me laugh and blush at the same time LOL….tsk tsk…thank you for such lovely words xx

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      • February 16, 2015 at 4:55 PM

        Would you mind if I used your photo to write a “dark” tanka?

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        • February 16, 2015 at 6:25 PM

          of course not, would love it, please let me know when you’ve done it and the link, itching to see it hehe x

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            • February 17, 2015 at 10:13 AM

              I saw this, bravo, wow, really wasn’t expecting that and if you look at my limmerick its a kind of dark but humorous assimile in ways to yours if that makes sense? No idea if I used the right word hehe x

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              • February 17, 2015 at 3:18 PM

                Glad you enjoyed the Tanka .. hope to have time to read your limerick I’m very curious to see how you got both dark and humorous …

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                • February 17, 2015 at 3:20 PM

                  hah, well apparently I didn’t write it so much as a limmerick ie in the length of the sentences, I am going to try and write again but I like the poem as it is, managed the aabba and some alliterations but it’s all new for me, the sentence length I just totally forgot. I might end up with two on the post by the end of today hehe xx Looking forward to hearing what you think x

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  10. February 16, 2015 at 4:15 PM

    Reading your first free verse shows you are a natural, my dear. Love the photo you used as well. Your haiku is great and I am still a student at Carpe Diem where we are guided at every prompt with encouragement and ideas…A great student you are but a poet you already have been…let it flow…:) huggles to you xx

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    • February 16, 2015 at 4:30 PM

      hehe, blushes, thank you, I might find the courage to pop over to Carpe Diem some day then…one day, some day! Thank you for your lovely encouraging words, means al ot x

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      • February 16, 2015 at 4:58 PM

        I just finished a poem for this prompt but not sure I have time to do all the assignments…It will be posted on my other blog Tournesol dans un Jardin

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        • February 16, 2015 at 6:25 PM

          I took a peek you are so talented at this is just seems to come so easily to you, i am sure it takes moments, lovely and thank you for the mention..blushing now x

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          • February 17, 2015 at 12:12 AM

            It does not come easily actually some can take all day

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            • February 17, 2015 at 10:18 AM

              yikes, yes pondering i guess, i found a voice recorder app, put my limerick on it in stages as i worked it out, otherwise i end up forgetting x

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      • February 16, 2015 at 5:19 PM

        You have a way of writing very sensual and I wish I had your vocabulary…wow! I did this for fun but not sure I will have time to do it each day…I look forward to following you and Karuna though:) https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com/2015/02/16/heavens-fragrance-troiku/

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        • February 16, 2015 at 6:18 PM

          ooohhhh i didnt realize she was doing it, i am so struggling to follow all the blogs i follow, cant face unfollowing any so i get way way behind, must catch up with her x

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  11. February 16, 2015 at 4:44 PM

    Justine, I’ve read all the mind-bending, heart-soaring poetry you’ve written and shared long before you signed up for this course. Here you go on a new adventure, and I don’t know how much more touching your verses will be, but I wait with open arms 💜

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    • February 16, 2015 at 6:26 PM

      ooh la la, i was trying to remember how much poetry i had written before i think only two, my mind lets me down sometimes lol. I don’t mind writing a bit of oooh la la poetry, if you know what I mean but would feel odd posting it here, might upset someone haha… huggles x

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    • February 16, 2015 at 6:27 PM

      oh and i mean ooh la la not slam it and bang it type of thing urgh how horrible x

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    • February 16, 2015 at 6:27 PM

      cant believe i said that!!!

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      • February 16, 2015 at 6:56 PM

        LOL I KNEW what you meant !!! Your poems are lyrical and love-filled and totally romantic in expressive feelings.

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  12. February 16, 2015 at 5:04 PM

    Poetry is the best words in the best order. It’s so difficult, but you can do it. (like water rolling off a duck’s back…just to keep in the theme) Can’t wait to see what your pen splashes up next. Wade into it and write on!

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    • February 16, 2015 at 6:23 PM

      hah thats fantastic, what a fabulous way to put it, poetry in motion just flows on to the keyboard from you it seems 🙂 xxx

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  13. February 16, 2015 at 5:38 PM

    Felicidades por inten tarlo. Estoy seguro de que va a conseguir cosas muy bonitas.

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  14. Jen
    February 16, 2015 at 5:58 PM

    Well done, you brave lady! Well done 🙂
    I really like the first one best — so elegant and sensual 😀

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  15. February 16, 2015 at 6:55 PM

    Oh, you cut and mixed your original poem into a haiku! Love the idea and the result 🙂

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    • February 16, 2015 at 7:20 PM

      yes, i thought it might be nice to see the two different styles of same or similar poem, wasnt sure which bit would go missing but it just kind of happened x

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    • February 16, 2015 at 7:20 PM

      ps thank you for your lovely words x

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      • February 16, 2015 at 7:21 PM

        You’re welcome, I really enjoyed it.

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  16. February 16, 2015 at 7:30 PM

    Poetry suites you well! And I love the abstract photo!

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    • February 16, 2015 at 8:18 PM

      thank you so much on both counts! Encouragement helps heaps, appreciated 🙂

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  17. February 16, 2015 at 8:52 PM

    Well done all around, Justine. I’m enjoying trying to figure out what the photo is. 🙂

    janet

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    • February 17, 2015 at 10:24 AM

      haha the photo is of my shower head, i had a shower this morning and that inspired the poem hehe x I got my socks wet trying to get the picture hehe

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  18. February 16, 2015 at 8:59 PM

    What a creepy picture!
    It reminds of Poltergeist! :s

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    • February 17, 2015 at 10:24 AM

      lol, yes your right or wait a minute…..the guy who stabs the girl inthe shower, what is it called? xx

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  19. February 16, 2015 at 9:02 PM

    Agree with other comments about the smooth, sensual choice of words. Particularly like when someone stretches my vocab. Had to look up “perspex”! 🙂 And Love love your photography. Thanks for stopping by my corner.

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    • February 17, 2015 at 10:23 AM

      thank you so much for your uplifting and poistive words. I was quite nervous but feeling a little braver today. How did you go with the limerick? x

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  20. February 17, 2015 at 4:10 PM

    Your poems are very good. I’m impressed! I’m also impressed that you worked on the device, i.e. simile. I decided to be content just doing the haiku!

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